deviltigress
2003-04-22 � 5:14 p.m.
simplicity
the rain stains the brick a darker red
slowly i'm rolling out of her bed
the rain stains the streets a darker black
i dress my face in stone
because i can't go back
-She Says - Ani Difranco
First Impressions:
"pretty green background..."
[5/5]
Content:
You have a lot about your relationship with Garrett and how you guys fight a lot and how you seem to be depressed, etc. Honestly though, it just didn't interest me. You were descriptive in your writing, but didn't really tell me anything with it. You had a nice sense of vocabulary, but didn't do anything with it - For example, your entry here - you said, "Today was inspiring for me." but yet none of the following entry had anything to do with inspiration. It wasn't bad really - you sound like you could be a good writer - but it just didn't say a lot. Work on your style and form in your writing, and it would be great. Also, you say that you are depressed, and talk about it quite a bit (that's not the issue). But, you never seem to look or think about your depression, talk of it, anything like that - just say how depressed you are and how horrible you feel. Please, don't take that the wrong way - I have experienced depression as well, so I am not against reading about it. I just wanted to know more, to hear (rather, read) your thoughts about or on your depression, things like that. ::shrug:: Not my thing, I guess.
[15/25]
Design:
I like the design. It was simple, and the green was nice. It didn't hurt my eyes (always a plus). The spaces between the letters was okay - though I might make it just a little bit spaller - it got weird on my eyes after a while (maybe that's just me). The other problem was in your archive page - when the text flipped around (an effect I like), the text started to go onto the next line - but when I rolled over to get to the link, it came back up to the first line. Maybe make the window a little bit bigger, and that would solve the problem. All around, though, it was good. [20/25]
Update:
You don't update every day, and there aren't multiples to make up for it. its not a big problem to me, because I think you should only write when you have something to say, but I have to take some points off. [6/10]
Navigation:
Beautifully easy. [5/5]
Errors:
I didn't really see any... [5/5]
Contact:
Email and guestmap. [4/5]
Bonus:
You had a link to a bio about you, as well as to your profile - but there really wasn't anything in your profile. you also have a rings page, and a link to an entry about custom designs that you make. [11/15]
Returnable:
Probably not. [1/5]
Total: [72/100]
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